I need you to edit 3 things in this paper based on the feedback provided.
1. As mentioned the notes in the picture, can you please make a job description at the end of the original paper for the bank manager “Please see the attached example”?
2. Do not focus on what BOA has done. Focus on what you think they should do regarding recruiting new employees. Like new recruiting strategies that you think will work better”
3. Can you please make sure to clearly state what the compensation system/package is that you are proposing. Remove any generalities (e.g., things like “such as”… such as suggests that there are aspects that you are not including. Clearly convey exactly what would go into the compensation package and explain why).